I like the action sequences a lot better when they're broken up like you did here, and let me just reiterate that you've got everyone's dialogue so spot-on. See, now you've written bookverse and it's awesome. You haven't got excuses anymore. :D Excellent job!
Author's Response: Oh, I'm sure I could come up with excuses. :p However, you are hereby appointed Beta-girl for all my future forays into the bookverse. Because you did an awesome job with the corrections mixed in with the reassurances that I didn't suck and I love you. *huggles*
Reviews For Good Timing
Loooooooove. Fabulous character interaction, and great action!